Personal Letter
Dear Professor Blackstone,
I am Khai Jun Wei, a first-year mechanical engineering student enrolled in your critical thinking and communicating module. I am writing this letter to offer insights into my educational background, communication strengths and weaknesses, specific module objectives, and what distinguishes me from my peers.
Allow me to briefly introduce myself. In contrast to the majority of my peers, my educational journey is somewhat unique. Unlike those who followed the path of either a junior college or polytechnic, I have experienced a fair share of both. My venture into engineering started out in Singapore Polytechnic, where I pursued studies in Aeronautical Engineering. This choice was rooted in my profound passion for mathematics.
In terms of communication strengths, my forte lies in confident and articulate speech, enabling me to present ideas with conviction and assurance. This proficiency has not only enhanced my academic performance but also played a pivotal role in my role as a mathematics tutor, where I have accumulated over six years of teaching experience. This extensive experience has enabled me to elucidate complex concepts in a simplified manner. However, I also acknowledge a personal weakness: occasional inarticulateness, leading to difficulties in articulating my thoughts effectively.
For this module, I have established two specific objectives. Firstly, I aspire to refine my communication skills to the point where I can convey intricate ideas with utmost clarity and precision, eliminating ambiguity. Secondly, I aim to foster effective bidirectional communication by promoting active listening and adept responses.
What sets me apart from others is the unique blend of my experiences and personal accomplishments. In addition to my noteworthly pedagogical skills as a mathematics tutor, I have achieved a remarkable milestone by embarking on a rigorous daily running regimen for the past 20 months, resulting in a 30-kilogram weight loss. This accomplishment emphasised my unwavering determination, discipline, and resilience.
Professor, I am eager to leverage on your invaluable communication expertise, and I eagerly anticipate our upcoming lessons. I would like to leave you with a thought-provoking quotation: "Mathematics is the bridge between theory and reality, and effective communication is the tool that allows us to cross it."
Sincerely,
Khai Jun Wei
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(Taufiq, Quinian,Weili)
Excellent email. You gave sufficient and relevant information and provided examples. Language use is solid and your email is well-organised. Can clearly see that you used the PEEL method.
ReplyDeleteThanks Taufiq!
DeleteI must say your English language must be superb than the rest of your classmates. Lots of unique words was used in your letter. Honestly, it's a very unique and interesting letter to read. It truly tells your personalities and skills that you currently possessed in a well-organized manner. Great Work!
ReplyDeleteThank you SY! Truely appreciate rhe comment given!
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ReplyDeleteDear Jun Wei,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this highly informative letter. It's well organized, clearly focused and richly detailed as you provide meaningful examples to illustrate the important points you make about yourself.
I'm especially impressed in this post by how you explain what makes you special, including your "unwavering determination, discipline, and resilience," and how you leveraged those traits to make a physical transformation. That story telling hits an emotional nerve for your audience.
You also detail well your comm skills strength and weakness, and tie these to your math tutoring and your goals for the module. I was happy to read how you aim to communicate "with utmost clarity and precision, eliminating ambiguity," which is a noble goal for anyone who wants to teach.
In terms of language use, this is really a fine effort, with only a few errors in overuse of caps. Here is one example: ... the path of either a Junior College or Polytechnic.... Do you understand why the caps are not needed?
I look forward to learning more from you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Dear Professor Blackstone,
DeleteI would like to extend my gratitude for this supportive reply. I am flattered with the description of my goal being of noble nature, I must say that my teaching goal is part of a broader mission, and I'm just one piece of the puzzle. It's my deep passion for education and a commitment to making a positive impact that drives me forward.
I have noted on the language use pertaining to the overuse of caps. Just learnt that when referring to junior colleges or polytechnics in a generic or non-specific sense, they are treated as common nouns, and capitalization is not necessary.
With these, I look forward to gaining further insights from your extensive years of expertise to enhance my abilities as an educator, myself.
Sincerely,
Khai JunWei